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What is the greatest value of competitive sport for young people?

It is often said that competitive sport is a key factor in young people's development. Sport activities have always had a great deal of benefits on each individual. It is perceptible that in a competitive sportperson's life there are plenty of aspects in stark contrast to others lifestyle. But what are the greatest value of competitive sport for the youth?

Firstly, competitive sports assure a healthy lifestyle, a clear thinking and stable physical condition. In order to get ready to a high-standard competition it is necessar perseverance and regular traning. In this way the blood circulation get better, preventing a great amount of diseases. From another point of view, if a young person practises sport regularly, he is balanced, sport becomes part of his life, an activity, which effaces the everyday problems and difficulties.
Another great benefit of taking part on competitive sport events is the positive attitude that young people get. Achieving eminent results on contest requires optimism. Wise people said that mind had always been over matter. In my opinion just if a competitor has self-confidence than he will get closer to win.
As soon as a young sportsman had won a race, tumbled to that the lots of practise has its payoff. In this way evolves a possitive attitude in young people and they find the motivation for each day.
To sum up, the participation on competitive sports events has a magnificent effect on the youth, because they acquire a positive mindset, become robust and learn that if they want to reach their purpose, then will have to work hard, tirelessly.
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to others lifestyle -> to others' lifestyle
what are the greatest value -> what is the greatest value vagy what are the values
it is necessar perseverance and regular traning -> perseverance and regular traning are necessary
the blood circulation get better -> blood circulation gets better
a great amount of diseases -> many diseases
practises sport -> practises sports
he is balanced, sport becomes part of his life -> he or she is balanced, the sport becomes part of his or her life
an activity, which -> an activity which
effaces -> affects
the everyday problems -> everyday problems
the positive attitude that young people get -> the positive attitude that young people gain
eminent results -> outstanding results
on contest -> on a contest vagy on contests
mind had always been over matter -> ez a "mind over matter" dolog nagyon spirituális meg paranormális értelmű... valami más kellene.
just if a competitor has self-confidence than he will get closer to win ->
egyrészt nem than, hanem then, aztán he helyett he or she, de nekem fura az egész. Lehet, hogy jó, de fura. Én inkább máshogy fogalmaznák:
a competitor gets closer to win only if he or she has self-confidence
sportsman -> sportsperson
tumbled to that the -> ez alatt mit akartál érteni?
then will have to -> they will have to
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